Recent Comments

Anonymous
3/14/16, 4:48 AM
Great episode! The increased muscle growth is hot, even if it doesn't happen that easily in real life. This story, like our Xavier, is progressing well!
Anonymous
3/14/16, 3:24 AM
Getting hard just reading this chapter.
Chrissy
3/14/16, 2:12 AM
I love this one so much, probably because I identify with Julian so much. Would love another story about the gang!
Anonymous
3/14/16, 1:54 AM
Good start, but way too short. Think of 2,000 words as a minimum
Guy
3/13/16, 11:18 PM
Just checked out your tumblr and loved that too haha, keep up the good work!!
Anonymous
3/13/16, 8:13 PM
I loved this a lot. I'm a big fan of foot stuff and braindead hypnosis. More like this please, but maybe with even more about the brainwashing/hypnotizing aspect and how it's working on the guys! Would love to BBall players and guys of different ethnicities (Latino, Black, Asian).
Anonymous
3/13/16, 7:56 PM
If you used MSWord, there is a review function for spelling and grammar/usage. The key to writing is not the original drafting. It's the editing -- constant, numerous, continuous. If you haven't read your own story a dozen times, you're doing yourself a disservice. The story line is hot. Don't let usage and grammar get in the way.
Anonymous
3/13/16, 7:50 PM
Thanks for the new chapter. Loved the first one and this one as well. Last comment is right on -- lycra is hot. Might want to have the players start having contact with the other players. That could be interesting.
Anonymous
3/13/16, 6:49 PM
Hi, Jake Fox. Well, of course I'd like to read more of this story! It stopped in a promising point. After reading all of this suggestions, maybe you could mix some of this suggestions: trashing Rob's expensive suit, and then turn him into a ridiculous parody of himself, with new memories of being bullied by black thugs in high school. I love this story, please don't let it unfinished.
Jake Fox
3/13/16, 5:15 PM
Hi guys I have been really busy with work lately so haven't had the time for more chapters. I am freed up a little now! So I just wanted to know if people want me to continue? Your thoughts............... Thanks