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Apr 19, 2010
Anonymous
2/19/16, 7:57 AM
This was always a fave of mine
xORRiNx
2/19/16, 7:51 AM
I appreciate the feedback. I have an outline that I've been following, making tweaks along the way. I realized that a month-long curse being explained in a day-to-day format would indeed be too slow to read (and write) on a site like this so I reworked everything and can say now that this will be a 10-chapter MAX story... roughly 10 days of story time. I can still keep my original vision of a slow and detailed TF while making it a practical read.
Anonymous
2/19/16, 7:34 AM
I like your story and not opposed to a slower pace. However in my humble opinion I think it might be better to take more time between updates and release longer chapters where more happens. I'm finding it very hard to get into you story because its becoming fairly anticlimactic. If not I think I'd almost rather ignore your story for now and read it in a month when it's more complete. I also think that when people write stories like this and allow for so much feedback along the way it becomes something less unique because the authors inevitably try to appease their readers too much.
Anonymous
2/19/16, 1:57 AM
PERHAPS SOMETIME IN A FUTURE CHAPTER,THE CURSE WILL BACKFIRE ON AHAD & RANDY, CAUSING AHAD & ADAM TO START 'BONDING....', AS WILL THE FEM'S RANDY & ROBBIE, THESE PAIRS OF FELLOWS MAY WELL DISCOVER THAT THEY HAVE MUCH MORE IN COMMON WITH EACH OTHER THEN THEIR CURRENT ROOMMATES ???....[A CONCLUDING FUTURE CHAPTER ?]
Again auto me subtlety
2/19/16, 1:57 AM
I enjoy the subtle changes. Please don't jack Adam up, turn him into superhero, steal muscles from twenty guys. Slow and steady is cool. Twink, lisp, whatever.... They are on day four only. We have so many fast stories. Best unique story of the year.... for taking the courage to slow it down. Thanks.
A CONCERNED READER
2/19/16, 1:24 AM
THIS IS THE THIRD TIME I'V RE-READ THE STORY, SO FAR, & IT STILL GET'S ME OFF ! CAN'T WAIT TO SEE IF JOHN BECOMES THE DIRTY, COCK OBSESSED PERVERT I'M HOPING FOR. IF SO, ALL THE LOVE HE FELT FOR HIS [TRUE] SON'S WILL BE 100% GONE, [TRANSFERRED TO ALEX] LEAVING ONLY SEXUAL LUST TOWARD J.J. & DISGUST & LOATHING FOR JAKE...ALSO ALL THAT LOVE FOR MARIA SHOULD TURN TO 'HATRED' FOR HER & PROBABLY ALL WOMEN...WHO KNOWS WHAT ALEX MIGHT HAVE IN STORE FOR THE WOMEN IN THE BASEMENT ?
xORRiNx
2/19/16, 1:10 AM
Yikes! Thanks for the heads up on the lisp!
Anonymous
2/19/16, 12:41 AM
How can I meet Master Wormwood???
Anonymous
2/19/16, 12:08 AM
This carries over from past chapters, but you REALLY need to learn how a lisp works. It affects the letter S. Not T, not K, 'jutht' the letter S. If you want to put the lisp in as a stereotype, that's fine, but if your effeminate twink is saying things like "othhay," he's got other speech problems that aren't a lisp. Now that I've said that, I like the transformation and would like to see it continue. Just fix the lisp thing. :P
xORRiNx
2/18/16, 11:07 PM
The story will continue to be told slowly. The next chapter will not be what you guys are describing below. I'm sorry :(. Eventually yes though. :)