Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/19/16, 12:28 AM
Hey Edlam - I'm the one who wrote (in a previous installment) that just having guys re-educated to suck cock gets fairly boring, and I feel you're getting close to that saturation point. I'd like to point out something else which has been bothering me. You've switched your point of view. The story began with the focus on Jake. You built him up with lots of background & context so that the reader identifies and sympathizes with him. But once Alex took over - Alex has become the focus of the story. Now that you've added Alex's backstory, Jake barely registers as anything meaningful. You've made it clear he has no thinking brain left, all he does is parrot what he's told. No doubt you're going to make his father also give him the filthy queer treatment. Maybe you have a way out of all this (paging Eric, and--dammit--don't forget those earplugs), but you've made your story so focused with so few alternatives to the inevitable re-education that I find it not only frustrating but leading nowhere. Another series on this site, "Pollination -the Series" is an example of a excellent author with a brilliant idea except that he couldn't figure out how to end it so he just stopped with an author's note. Very frustrating and unfulfilling. I hope that you are aware of painting yourself into a similar hole which I feel would ruin the entire story. (And frankly, I hope a deux ex machina happens, and a heavy tree branch falls on Alex, breaking his skull in two - and I'll happily read about all the blood and brains spilling out of such an unrewarding character.)
Anonymous
1/19/16, 12:23 AM
This chapter was just meh. The other chapters were great, but this one just didn't have the same affect
Axel
1/18/16, 11:55 PM
Just found this series a couple days ago and i got to say edlam i love it! I love how you detail and give everyone so much background. My favorite chapter was chapter 3 because of JJ's humiliation is there a chance alex is going to de-alpha JJ? He seemed to be so perfect i was hoping alex would humiliate him further. Just wonder cant wait to see how involved John and the Cop are going to be. Thanks for the great story edlam!
Anonymous
1/18/16, 10:38 PM
Hey Edlam, just keep writing your story and don't pay any inordinate attention to these comments. I for one think this latest chapter was fantastic and the only thing wrong with it is that I have to wait for chapter 8. Can't wait to explore "Daddy's" re-education and personally I find him being aware of how he was mindfucked super hot!
Anonymous
1/18/16, 9:42 PM
I know that chapter 7 was a 'transition' chapter to prepare the reader for lot's of 'sex' coming-up in chapter 8: but I hope you keep the sex scene's easy to follow, with four guy's [& the potential of #6, the cop] & not make a confusing orgy that's hard to follow...Please continue to explain the characters motivation for their actions & not just the regular 'run-of-the-mill' gay sex....LET'S NOT FORGET that every single man who has been 're-educated' still views homosexual sex from the totally perverted homophobic view-point of Alex...So their sex act's should be of the type that fall within the dirty 'mind-set' of the 'Gay haters' & anti gay bully's....
Feb 14, 2009
austin
1/18/16, 8:42 PM
i love this story!
Johan
1/18/16, 7:31 PM
I'm really looking forward to the 8 :) Thank you!!
EdIam
1/18/16, 2:43 PM
Don't worry! I understood what you meant completely. No need to apologize in the slightest.
EdIam
1/18/16, 2:42 PM
Hahaha, relax everyone! He knows for a reason. It's worded exactly as I wanted it to be. I hope to have Chapter 8 done ASAP, but it's my last semester of nursing school which means I'll be crazy busy. I'll do what I can to get the next chapter out there soon. I love how much passion you guys seem to have for this little series! It shall all be explained in due time!
FAITHFUL READER
1/18/16, 7:36 AM
HOW ABOUT LETTING THE READER KNOW THE 'JUST' OF WHAT JJ & ALEX RE EDUCATED JOHN ABOUT...ALSO DON'T UNDERSTAND WHY JOHN KNOWS HE WAS HYPNOTIZED. ISN'T THE POINT OF THE RE EDUCATION GIZMO TO RE ORDER A BROS BRAIN & THINKING SO HE'S A DIFFERENT GUY, BUT DOESN'T KNOW THAT THE RE EDUCATOR DID IT TO HIM, [THE EXCEPTION IS JJ BECAUSE HE TRUSTS ALEX & EVEN HE DOESN'T KNOW THE EXTENT OF HIS MENTAL TRANSFORMATION]..I THINK THE HYPNOTIC ANGLE IS A MISTAKE !