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anonymous reader
1/17/16, 9:18 PM
your characterization of the main hypnotist's character is superb! To be honest, his sense of morality and his character has made me think highly of him :D In this site, a moral hypnotist is a unique character, so I commend you for taking that route as well as keeping that route and story highly entertaining! Keep it up!
anon reader
1/17/16, 8:49 PM
While I admit that the descriptions here are better than "I love him, but" it seems I prefer that story over this, only because I really don't like bullies. But that's just me. I hope you continue your efforts in writing great stories! Though, I do wish Alex gets a dose of his own medicine :D
A San Francisco Reader
1/17/16, 8:08 PM
Thank goodness we finally have chapter 7...It's been a long wait & here's hoping #8 comes along sooner...I also enjoy all the build-up's to the characters re education, though I hope we get to hear some of what jj actually said to his dad, as well as what Alex added...[for example what makes John assume that there's a no clothes policy in the house ?]...also I hope we get to hear in Johns [new] own words what he now thinks of his 'new' third son & his other two boy's...Now that we know the 'deep love' he formally felt for his wife, it might also be interesting to hear how he now feels & relates to her......Really looking forward to the next chapter !!!
BoonBoon
1/17/16, 7:44 PM
Yay!!! Awesome as always!!! Man, this is fantastic, the next chapter will be the explosive! I like that you've left Mrs. Henderson and Vicky in the basement, I really hate to read about tortured women, even in fiction. I agree with you, Mr. Edlam, a detailed description of the character previous to the sex scene, helps to increase the sense of change and corruption. Is by far more interesting and hotter than a simply series of sex scenes. Darn, I'm wondering what you have in mind for John! I like the brief cameo of Officer Cockforbrains and how JJ and Alex made fun of him after he left. Will be a long wait for his return (preferably with his uniform matted with cum to his torso!)
Anonymous
1/17/16, 5:29 PM
I have to say, this was an interesting twist. Well done!
Anonymous
1/17/16, 3:49 PM
Hot story. Would you mind giving us an estimate on when the next chapter is coming up? I cant wait.
EdIam
1/17/16, 3:18 PM
Eh, it's far more important to me to create a vivid picture of the person prior to their re-education. I look at this chapter to be similar to chapter 1 in which you really get the chance to understand Jake's personality and morality. Same with the beginning of chapter 3 in getting to know JJ. John is definitely a vital character for the story, so I want him to be pretty fleshed out prior to seeing him do the things he's going to be doing. Chapter 8 will mostly focus on John's new perspective and therefore will have more 'action'.
EdIam
1/17/16, 3:14 PM
Not mad at all! I don't feel much pressure to get the stories done at any pace other than my own. Besides, I don't want to rush a story and not get all the details in that I want. I'm very happy so many want the story so quickly...its just not feasible for me with as much going on as I do. I just want to reassure you all that I'm not going to abandon this story even when it may take a while for the next chapter. Thanks, all!
Johan
1/17/16, 1:57 PM
I'm kinda dissapointed :( Not actual action here...
Anonymous
1/17/16, 12:06 PM
oh my! poor dad! But those plots... I am REALLY looking forward to the next chapter! Those changes among these three family members! Please! So sexy! Daddy and his THREE sons! Let's have fun! Thanks, EdIam!