Recent Comments

Insignia
12/22/15, 5:05 AM
Sorry it's taken so long guys! Taking exams which are a bitch. Hopefully whoever has enjoyed this work, will continue to get your climaxes from this haha.
Anonymous
12/22/15, 2:34 AM
At the very end, [& lets hope that's somewhere in the distant future, in say chapter 15 to 17,] we can hope for a 'happy ending', when someone new or from the first chapter returns & makes everything 'normal' again...but in the mean time I hope the mind controller bully has a field day with lot's more demented turns !
Anonymous
12/21/15, 11:53 PM
Just to say this... I've never been emotionally invested in a MC story as I have this one. It's super hot, but at the same time incredibly depressing and sad. It's so super rare that I find myself NOT rooting for the mind controller. Hoping for a "happy" ending but either way, this story has me hooked like no story I've ever read before.
Anonymous
12/21/15, 5:50 PM
EDLAM : THANKS FOR BEING SUCH A GREAT GUY, & SO UNDERSTANDING ! YOU KNOW THE COMMENT'S ARE MEANT WITH THE BEST OF INTENTIONS: OF COURSE IT'S YOUR STORY, BUT WE'RE ALL ENJOYING IT SO MUCH & LOOKING FORWARD TO CHAPTER 6 AND BEYOND ! HAVE A GREAT CHRISTMAS....
EdIam
12/21/15, 5:25 PM
Wow!! The responses are blowing me away! Honestly stepped away from the site yesterday not because this isn't everyone's favorite chapter but because I went to Star Wars. Thanks to EVERYONE with feedback. I don't let those that don't necessarily feel this chapter get to me at all. The story is progressing just how I want to. But, man, it's blowing my mind the amount of passion my silly little story is inspiring. Working a double today, unfortunately, due to a sick coworker, so can't get back to the writing until tomorrow. To all of you, the supportive AND constructive comments mean a lot to me. All of you write what you're thinking and express what you may or may not enjoy. Any comment left merely means my story has affected you enough to want to talk about it. I'm not disheartened in the slightest! I'm honored that so many care for my characters!! Chapter 6 will be coming shortly!
I am scared
12/21/15, 4:57 PM
By the way, anyone finds the above big blue picture on this website a little...scary?
Brody
12/21/15, 4:39 PM
Honestly, I'm hoping for some karma, but that's just me. As a person with stories on this site, you have to understand that at the end of the day, the story is the author's. He is writing what is important to him and no one else. Yes this is a grim story and might not be to everyone's liking, but let's admit, in the history of this site and its previous site, ncmc, there has never been such buzz about a story. I wish I was half the writer that he is. There is a natural build to chapter stories and you might not like every chapter, but keep with it. It may surprise you
Anonymous
12/21/15, 4:35 PM
Just a rough guess: several posts here are probably from the same guy(or few guys?), judging from the writing style, capitalization, and special usage of punctuation marks. So maybe it's only he/they being downright rude.
Anonymous
12/21/15, 3:03 PM
PLEASE MAKE MORE!!!!!!
Cliff
12/21/15, 12:04 PM
First of all, please forgive me if I make any errors; I'm from asia, my English is pretty basic. As an old NCMC reader, I'm so surprised there are so many people commenting one story! It means Mr. Edlam definitely does a great job ! And, as an book editor, I want to give Mr. Edlam some suggestions: 1. Don't care too much about comments. They're reader's hope, not your burden. If you like invisible scenario, humiliation or break a decent family, just write it. 2. Keep the main plot simple, if you want to preserve some flexibility. For JJ, Jake and Alex, it's easier to undo the damage (yeah, I still hope for a happy ending ! ^^ ). But in ch5, their parents and Vicky were involved, I guess the only way to solve the situation is to use "Re-Educator" on them. Since the device is controlled by Alex, undoubtedly there would be more humiliation in the story. It's not a bad choice, just means you would be harder to make "turn the table" believable. 3. Keep writing. There are indeed some rude comments, but please write the story for yourself. No matter the quality or response, an ending story is always better than an unending one, you'll know better what will do, what won't in a story. It's good for you if you still want to write stories in the future. Hope my suggestions would somehow encourage you to write the next chapter :)