Recent Comments

Anonymous
12/21/15, 5:50 PM
EDLAM : THANKS FOR BEING SUCH A GREAT GUY, & SO UNDERSTANDING ! YOU KNOW THE COMMENT'S ARE MEANT WITH THE BEST OF INTENTIONS: OF COURSE IT'S YOUR STORY, BUT WE'RE ALL ENJOYING IT SO MUCH & LOOKING FORWARD TO CHAPTER 6 AND BEYOND ! HAVE A GREAT CHRISTMAS....
EdIam
12/21/15, 5:25 PM
Wow!! The responses are blowing me away! Honestly stepped away from the site yesterday not because this isn't everyone's favorite chapter but because I went to Star Wars. Thanks to EVERYONE with feedback. I don't let those that don't necessarily feel this chapter get to me at all. The story is progressing just how I want to. But, man, it's blowing my mind the amount of passion my silly little story is inspiring. Working a double today, unfortunately, due to a sick coworker, so can't get back to the writing until tomorrow. To all of you, the supportive AND constructive comments mean a lot to me. All of you write what you're thinking and express what you may or may not enjoy. Any comment left merely means my story has affected you enough to want to talk about it. I'm not disheartened in the slightest! I'm honored that so many care for my characters!! Chapter 6 will be coming shortly!
I am scared
12/21/15, 4:57 PM
By the way, anyone finds the above big blue picture on this website a little...scary?
Brody
12/21/15, 4:39 PM
Honestly, I'm hoping for some karma, but that's just me. As a person with stories on this site, you have to understand that at the end of the day, the story is the author's. He is writing what is important to him and no one else. Yes this is a grim story and might not be to everyone's liking, but let's admit, in the history of this site and its previous site, ncmc, there has never been such buzz about a story. I wish I was half the writer that he is. There is a natural build to chapter stories and you might not like every chapter, but keep with it. It may surprise you
Anonymous
12/21/15, 4:35 PM
Just a rough guess: several posts here are probably from the same guy(or few guys?), judging from the writing style, capitalization, and special usage of punctuation marks. So maybe it's only he/they being downright rude.
Anonymous
12/21/15, 3:03 PM
PLEASE MAKE MORE!!!!!!
Cliff
12/21/15, 12:04 PM
First of all, please forgive me if I make any errors; I'm from asia, my English is pretty basic. As an old NCMC reader, I'm so surprised there are so many people commenting one story! It means Mr. Edlam definitely does a great job ! And, as an book editor, I want to give Mr. Edlam some suggestions: 1. Don't care too much about comments. They're reader's hope, not your burden. If you like invisible scenario, humiliation or break a decent family, just write it. 2. Keep the main plot simple, if you want to preserve some flexibility. For JJ, Jake and Alex, it's easier to undo the damage (yeah, I still hope for a happy ending ! ^^ ). But in ch5, their parents and Vicky were involved, I guess the only way to solve the situation is to use "Re-Educator" on them. Since the device is controlled by Alex, undoubtedly there would be more humiliation in the story. It's not a bad choice, just means you would be harder to make "turn the table" believable. 3. Keep writing. There are indeed some rude comments, but please write the story for yourself. No matter the quality or response, an ending story is always better than an unending one, you'll know better what will do, what won't in a story. It's good for you if you still want to write stories in the future. Hope my suggestions would somehow encourage you to write the next chapter :)
Anonymous
12/21/15, 9:45 AM
I've been reading this and I really can't say to much, I'm rea ding for the hell of it, the bully winning thing seems to be a common thing as of late and as I presonance hate the idea I'm just gonna hope things turn around and Jake actually wins this one, but I'm not gonna demand it
BoonBoon
12/21/15, 8:14 AM
WOW. Hey, people, calm down! with all respect, don't you think you're being too demanding with Mr. Edlam? He's been working hard for his readers during his vacations, and 90% of the comments are complaints and pontifications about what you think is good. Even worst, most of the comments are frankly rude and impolite.The man is putting all of his effort for his readers; the less you can do is show him some respect. There's a difference between make nice suggestions saying what you would like to read; and cramming the comment section with whines and demands of what his story should be. Someone even had the nerve to demand rewrites! How somebody can be so rude? If you are so dissatisfied, go and write your own story, you primitive yokel. Is HIS STORY, so HE knows the best what this should be, HE can take the direction that HE wants. If you want to follow him, fine, and if you don't, it is fine too, but don't be ungrateful. There was not much action on this one, I agree, but it's a transition chapter. I really like your work, Edlam!
Simple reader
12/21/15, 7:55 AM
So, @A CONCERNED READER you're basically saying that everyone else is wrong and that you're right for thinking outside the box? At least the story gets some feedback, and that is probably way more valuable for the author that a shiny knight defending his interests. Oh, well... What do I know? I'm not really digging the all "bully is winning" either, must be because of experience. But I'll keep reading it for now just because it's well written. So, yeap, not a big fan of this chapter, but good job nonetheless.