Recent Comments

Anonymous
12/21/15, 1:21 AM
Totally respect the decision to write for your own dick. I think something a little less heart-wrenching might sit better with most readers, but you've gotta do you--everyone gets off to different strokes!
Anonymous
12/21/15, 1:07 AM
Después de leer tantas historias en inglés, leer este tipo de historias en español se siente raro, pero no deja de ser una buena historia. ¡Espero la continúes!
A BIG BULLY LOVER
12/21/15, 12:58 AM
I'll continue to read this story, in the hopes that it returns to the themes of the first three chapters. Chapter four was a little weaker then the previous first three & this one is weaker still. What made the earlier ones exciting was not the sex scenes [ hell, every story has plenty of sex] but the exposition , the character development. As each new chapter has been filled with more sex than the previous one's they've lost sight of character development...As a Bully-Lover [ in fantasy/fiction, only], I was falling into love with J.J. , but he wasn't further developed,,,what a let-down !
Anonymous
12/21/15, 12:30 AM
CUT OUT ALL THAT INVISIBILITY SHIT, IT'S STUPID....LEAVE IT TO LESSER WRITERS !
Anonymous
12/21/15, 12:26 AM
Of course all the stories are 'fiction' & the authors can always write whatever they want, That's not the point...Our comments, are just that: comments to 'aid' the writer if their interested in what has 'turned-on' or been previously enjoyed by the reader. Myself, I prefer the mind-control & hypnosis stories, where a character totally changes the behavior of the other character[s] WITHOUT using any MAGIC...It's just to easy & fancyfull to just rub an amulet or magic rock, etc & have the person become completely different. What made this story more interesting was when we delved into their minds and saw how they rationalized their new behavior, becoming basic'ly a new version of their old self...I think the author really had it going in the earlier chapters with the beginning of JJ's 'transformation', but lost track of this & didn't go far enough in re-developing his 'new' complete Bully persona 100%. Alex also should have 'played-around' more with Jakes self perception. It seems like the author is rushing to bring in the Mother, Father & Girlfriend without having finished with completely redeveloping the three characters he already has on the scene!
Anonymous
12/20/15, 11:05 PM
sorry but i have to laugh at the people who think the invisible thing destroys the reality (how exactly?) but make no mention of a machine that can brainwash people. It's fiction....maybe we should stop being so demanding and let the author write what they want....
Anonymous
12/20/15, 10:17 PM
Honestly I'm hoping that Jake turns the tables by the end of this. As hot as I think this story is, I'm also starting to feel really really really bad for Jake.
Anonymous
12/20/15, 10:08 PM
It appears that Edlam's vacation took his mind off his story [???] causing him to rush it & give the reader a truly mundane sex scene out of a million other lesser stories...If he really wanted to do his readers a favor, Ed should REWRITE this chapter & get rid of all that silly 'invisible' shit , it's destroying the story...In the context of his story, JJ would never revert to his former 'sweet' self, even if only acting to impress Alex & Jake would have been just as perplexed if he'd seen JJ & Alex in a sex act as seeing JJ jacking-off & acting weird. The whole chapter just seemed 'off' & strangely 'rushed' in the context of what had come before...Sorry, but this chapter was a letdown. Here's hoping the author regains his stride in the near future.
Anonymous
12/20/15, 9:54 PM
Hi, EdIam, can you kindly reveal what else male characters will probably show up? I am a little distracted now by only the family part...Hope that we can see more?
Anonymous
12/20/15, 9:53 PM
I have been following this story with great interest, but have to admit, chapter 5 is MY LEAST FAVORITE....It was almost all a long fairly common sex scene...I agree 100% with the comment [18:08] & all this invisable Alex stuff is just plane silly, destroying the whole realistic premise of the re-educator..A lot of 'sex' does not in itself make a story 'sexier': What WAS SO HOT IN THE PREVIOUS CHAPTERS was how the characters mind was altered & how they rationalized their new behavior...There should have been a much longer build-up to sex between JJ & Jake...I would have enjoyed a day or two of further changes in JJ : how he now acts different, his walk [swagger ?], his manner's [or lack thereof], his new choice of wardrobe [tight, sexy, reveling ], his new habits [smoking, anyone?]...Then it would be time to start changing each family members relation's to him & each other..I feel the phone call was a big mistake. We should have seen the family reactions when they arrived home & how Alex would have solved them, one by one.....PLEASE CUT OUT ALL THIS INVISIBLE STUFF, IT'S SILLY & DESTROY'S THE WHOLE REALISTIC BASIS FOR THE STORY !!!!