Recent Comments

Anonymous
9/15/15, 11:59 AM
Awesome story! Didnt expect that OCS can have really happening stories! The WO must've been really happy that now got 2 "malay" PTIs as a slave!
Q
9/15/15, 7:23 AM
Very good, I love the style of writing. I laughed when he had to fuck broccoli.
Slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
9/15/15, 6:12 AM
Fuck! I came from the first part of the evening. So damned hot! Then came from the second part as well! Wish both parts could come true, not just the first part!
ShitJock18
9/15/15, 3:22 AM
Would have made the pig qb clean his shit from Mark's cock after shitfucking him.Mine does.Its the only way the shitpig can cum with his Master's shitty cock in his hungry for shit mouth
ShitJock18
9/15/15, 3:10 AM
Fuckin HOT and NASTY start!!.Shot three loads from my shit covered cock.Used hypnosis to turn my buds and coach into fat maduro smoking NASTY shitpigs like me.Can't wait to read more!!
Anonymous
9/15/15, 3:07 AM
I loved these two parts!
Anonymous
9/15/15, 12:03 AM
Twisted, but even hotter than the first instalment.
Tom
9/14/15, 11:44 PM
Thanks, That is very good feedback that I will take to heart in the next chapter.
Anonymous
9/14/15, 9:58 PM
I get the impression you're aiming for magic, but - at least to me - the "editing room" has a discordant VR vibe to it. Empty lines after paragraphs increase redability. The classic piece of advice: "Show, don't tell." For example, the then undescribed "mysterious figure" - you'd be better off showing a strange property or two instead of just labeling him mysterious. There have been a lot worse beginnings for a reality shift story. Do continue. I'd like to know what, if anything, is going on inside Grant's own head.
dickshit
9/14/15, 8:56 PM
this Richard wishes it was slave Richard rkglum@gmail.com