Recent Comments

Anonymous
9/16/15, 7:35 PM
Please, continue this series. I need to know where it's heading.
Anonymous
9/16/15, 5:56 PM
Second part please!!
Viridian
9/16/15, 4:12 PM
*Crickets* _That_ bad, hm? In a more serious vein: This was posted just hours before the NCMC closed and I was deprived of my feedback-fix. If you feel like saying something about the story, positive or negative, please don't hesitate to do so. I can also be reached at Gmail as zeabzinth.
webb025
9/16/15, 5:27 AM
I agree... but readers FORCED me to go on! :)
Anonymous
9/16/15, 4:24 AM
It's as good as any of your stories but I think the appeal of the first installment was the description of the brainwashing itself. The takeover of the boys minds.
Anonymous
9/15/15, 10:55 PM
He's not gonna move upstairs until the new worship rooms are ready!
Anonymous
9/15/15, 5:39 PM
"He drew a clear liquid from one of the vials into a syringe, and mixed it with fluid from another bottle." Horrible practise. (If you make a mistake with the second liquid, you've lost both doses.)
Anonymous
9/15/15, 5:38 PM
So far this is very nice. It wouldn't hurt to flush it out a bit more by giving descriptions of their appearances or examples of their feelings. As to the story I feel the progression was a bit rushed, with him having no true adaption to his given power. And for the story I hope he begins to see the opportunity to enhance his life and sexual gratification. Perhaps with his power escalating beyond what the man who awakened them predicted.
Anonymous
9/15/15, 5:19 PM
But... But... He moved _upstairs_!