This was an absolute blast.

Nice although I do wish it was longer and a bit better fleshed out. I would have also liked to see a slight difference in the was Daniel was controlled. Like you can still go for the pocket watch but maybe have Blake slightly sneaky to ambush him. He just seems to walk to and whip out his pocket watch and gets the guy to fall easily. I think Daniel who has concerns already about Toby would have had his guard up. But he seems to sit down with a stranger and switch his focus easily. You could have stretched and fixed the issue with him arriving and checking him out in his uniform being like you're wearing an actual butler uniform. And Toby goes of course I am Daniel what else would I wear. He tries to talk more with Toby but he insists he will be for now needs to focus on finishing dinner. And to go and relax have a glass of wine. Blake tries to make small talk to which Daniel would be a bit uncomfortable with but a glass of wine later, that Daniel tries to insist Toby doesn't have to pour but Toby insists he wants to sand not to worry himself just relax he loves doing this. Daniel sips at the wine while loosening his necktie and trying to still ask why a butler. Toby gives maybe answers like he loves the uniform and cleaning. He loves waking up everyday with a purpose and knowing what he was going to do. The wine was laced with drugs and starts taking effect and at that point Blake steps in to control the conversation and tries to focus on Daniel and drops how it he had that focus maybe his girlfriend wouldn't have left and his life in shambles. Daniel is taken Bank by Blake's bluntness and the fact he seems to know details of a private conversation and gets up to leave angry with both of them only to have a hard time moving. To which Blake says he's in no condition to drive and instructs Toby to take his keys away and return him to the dinner table next to him. He pulls out the pocket watch and calls out the time and calling Daniel a light weight but Daniel insists he's not drunk and asks what he put in the drink. Blake is playing with the pocket watch and catches Daniel locking on to the pocket watch and then the rest plays out. Obviously I would stretch it out but it would build to it a bit differently so the chapter isn't quiet the same. I feel you need a different transformation/mind control method or change up how you get to the same mind control.

Thank you guys for the support and suggestions, I really appreciate it. You guys are giving me a lot of ideas, and helping me improve my story telling skills.

This is quickly becoming an absolutely epic story. Great characters, hot sex, devious wish mechanics. Really loving it.

Amazing as always. Can't wait for the next chapter!

That was really nice and wholesome. Also very hot. I loved the twist in the middle and loved both the characters. If not for the author notes, I would’ve guessed who the author is. And if my guess was wrong, my next guess was that it was another author mimicking my first guess’s style. With the notes and the 4 year gap, I’m not sure at all.

Short and sweet :rofl: I was wondering what was going to happen to the cup, part of a well balanced breakfast!

loved this story, if only I would say

Apologies for the delayed responses! Only just realized I can comment without instantly revealing who I am lol To @[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171), @[SwimJock](/user/show/39947), and @[BlindSeer0](/user/show/381024) Thank you, thank you, thank you for the kind words. To @[Kellan](/user/show/920897) Given the challenge rules, my answer is: probably not. I think this story has enough worldbuilding to feel like a fully fleshed standalone, and I'm also just very pleased with my current ending, honestly. It hit the exact emotional beats and pathos I needed to make the happy ending feel deserved - at least it did for me, because I got a little misty eyed while writing it. My goal was to wrap everything up in a way that makes you feel warm and gooey while still leaving you with an urge to read more. I'm interested to hear if I've managed. To @[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Thank you! I do wonder what you'll think of my other work. This story uses a lot of the themes I love, but the romantic/fluffy tone is an outlier. I will warn you that the rest of my work features more manipulation, corruption, identity death, and other similarly unsettling or sometimes offensive ideas; I think that's still vague enough to keep anyone from figuring out who I am before the competition ends. To @[Mnem](/user/show/941744) Yes! Exactly what I was going for. I'm especially glad that the ethics ended up working for you here because there were definitely points I hemmed and hawwed about for fear of coming across as too preachy. Very happy too that you found the romantic aspect refreshing for the lack of manipulation... because manipulation's the most common thing I write. Very chuffed knowing I actually have range when I want to. To @[Bigger](/user/show/230293) Really happy someone else found the way I explored the practical aspects of enacting reality modifications interesting. I once had a dream of being a researcher - although said dream died a quick death when I actually did some work experience in a lab - and I had a lot of fun drawing on some of the wackier concepts of scientific theory I don't usually get to incorporate in my kinkier works. To address your question about the machine, I'll give you some insight into my intentions during the writing process. I really wanted to use this story to explore some ideas I often grapple with myself:       1.   Letting insecurity manipulate you into changing yourself to become something more "attractive" or palatable to others;       2.   Being unwilling to admit your own feelings to someone you love for fear being rejected or ruining a close friendship;       3.   Struggling with developing an attraction to someone very far removed from body types you find attractive, because of who they are; You raise an interesting question about Blake's massive crush being a constant fixture. Personally, I think the device had nothing to do with it and it's completely organic. But... death of the author! Your reading is allowed to be completely different from mine. ^{that said... blake progressively uses more and more metaphors/adjectives when describing the first time he saw andrew's smile to show how he just keeps getting sappier with each change i just love ridiculous pining and rarely get the chance to write it in my stories on here it also foreshadows blake being super mega horny for huge hypermasc andrew by the end hehe} To @[Gorbant](/user/show/927166) Thank you c: To @Anonymous I couldn't resist. [Outside In](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wO61D9x6lNY) and [Imagining the Tenth Dimension (annotated)](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XjsgoXvnStY) live rent free in my brain. As do all of the other bits of trivia, historical acts of cruelty, and general references I've sprinkled into this story.

Once again the use of the word pathetic. The rest of the paragraph was very positive thinking by the new bottom boy,. However by including the word pathetic in there, you give room for him to think badly about himself for bottoming. He should be happy and proud that he is giving of himself to the pack. Not feel negative about it. Sorry, I can get stuck on little things sometimes. But, it really breaks the flow for me. Btw - I haven’t said it, but I wouldn’t be all the way to this chapter if I wasn’t enjoying the writing.