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Mar 2, 2017
10/31/24, 1:33 AM
I never knew fat werewolves could be so hot!
Anonymous
10/31/24, 12:52 AM
Love ittt.
Hypnominion
10/31/24, 12:50 AM
I found the premise of coming in midway through the encounter, no knowing what came before (inviting a flashback), and wondering what comes next, to be as engaging as the transition, itself (which was quite well-crafted, BTW). I'd recommend developing a precursor narrative, giving the reader more insight as to who Brysen Hawk (GREAT name!) is, before hos transformation; also, I'd like some inclusion as to how/why the Skinhead uses cannabis instead of the stereotypical meth, even if it's a passing throwaway line acknowledging the difference (thus satisfying those who see it as problematic); perhaps it's a part of the mind control, and was used in the flashback sequences leading up to his arrival at the Skinhead's place...?
10/31/24, 12:26 AM
Damn that's hot AF! King of transformation stories! 🍆🍆🍆🍆🍆
10/30/24, 11:44 PM
Charlie, I'm surprised at you! Putting poor, slutty Luke through such an ordeal. But if Luke wants it... :hand_over_mouth: For real, I'm impressed how you're able to put familiar characters in few situations and their reactions and development in this AU you've created. Very well done!
Anonymous
10/30/24, 1:34 PM
Can’t wait for the next part! I keep re-reading it!! It’s so hot!!! Hopefully Nicks downfall has a twist on it because tri-hard’s 3rd incarnation is competing with Kurt’s manipulations.

10/30/24, 11:33 PM
@Anonymous There _might_ be a twist, but I just couldn't say! :zipper_mouth_face: (Also, sorry; seasonal breathing trouble has me less capable of writing as much as I'd like right now. May be a little delay.)
Anonymous
10/30/24, 11:09 PM
I feel like the other Jock/Bully should’ve gotten a wedgie. You know, twist things and make Lance, the one who is supposed to give nerds wedgies, give the other Jocks humiliating wedgies. Using his potential on the people who expect it the least. Otherwise, I love the livestock. Very well done :)
Nov 30, 2021
Hypnominion
10/30/24, 11:03 PM
One more thing: I'd just like to mention that I; too, am a Black man who has engaged in Raceplay in the past. Normally, I'd include an essay on the two types of people that I've observed engage in Black/White raceplay, but I'd rather not have to (as I've done it many times, before, elsewhere), unless I'm asked... Suffice it to say, like Musky Master, my motivations for engaging in the practice was for catharsis, and I've found his story entertaining for much the same reason.
10/30/24, 10:59 PM
Loved this! So excited for more!
Nov 30, 2021
Hypnominion
10/30/24, 10:52 PM
Your story has some highly engrossing elements, and I agree with Hypnothrill's assertion that it requires a more in-depth exploration of the process of becoming. Further. I think that a deeper narrative might also address some of the issues that the others have been writing about. For example, I suggest clarifying how the images on the screen trigger both the character's orgasm and his compliance (flickering hypnotic flashes? subliminal sounds/images?),delving more into the transitioning of mind-set, and adding in some narrative moments that reveal the motivations of the zookeepers a bit more directly. These are just my opinions, however; take or discard them as you will.